- My Angel and My Devil by Thomas Hawk
Today’s poem comes from Read Write Poem Prompt #94 and a photo, My Angel and My Devil, by Thomas Hawk. The photo didn’t inspire me much, but when I saw this post by Robert Lee Brewer, Poetic Form: Sevenlings, the poem came together.
My Angel, My Devil
Temptation – your apple,
your rose, your pomegranate -
comes into view.
Surrender – my wings,
my gown, my driven snow -
is out of the question.
Entwined we dance into the yonder.
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This was beautiful! (I do feel that she will surrender eventually…don’t we all?)
An elegant solution. Very nice. I’m liking simple more and more.
Hi Tamra,
You brought this together beautifully. That sevenling form is good!
I love the first (what do you call ‘em?) three lines. I’ve been trying to make that form work for me with no success. Yours is elegant
Red, white and blue! A commentary on the American experience? Our media society is built on the temptation image, yet ever since the Pilgrims, we have been a supremely religious nation, the two forever in tension. Nice!
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I like the way this makes itself fully out of balanced list of metaphor, matching the unmatchable, and then discarding all for the last line. Your use of color is a both pleasing and effective scaffold to support the poem’s shifts in perspective.
I love this short, colorful poem. Very well said.
Absolutely beautiful response to the prompt image.
The sevenlings form (which I sometimes find to be stilted) is really beautiful here. The color associations are wonderful.
Nicely done. Perfect form.
nicely done..thanks for sharing
I like it.
The last line is a clincher!
let the red bleed
so beautiful and says so much in so few words.
As i was reading, your words “It wasn’t easy” were echoing off the canyons of my mind….
when I had read this again, the words “nothing worth doing comes easy” were doing the echoing.
I adore that last line.
I really like your images of temptation and surrender.